I hate the idea of this project. I just really don’t think it’s possible to write about myself, to write about my entire life, to get something that can really show who I am out in only 400 words. I think it’s unrealistic, and doesn’t make any sense. I took AP English last year. Trust me, I know this stuff.
You know what I also know? I also know that Playstation is an extremely inferior system to Nintendo. I have my reasons, and not just because of the fact that I am a complete and total Nintendork at heart and to the rest of the world. I know so many people who have multiple Playstations because they frequently break. A friend of mine got the PS3 when it first came out, and it broke within a week, and he couldn’t even get it fixed. See, when the Wii had its issues with the strap of the Wiimote breaking and flying at their TVs and breaking them, they fixed the problem by sending everyone a newly remodeled, completely fixed strap, and including reminders to put the strap on so that the stupid people who are playing Bowling on Wii Sports don’t accidentally let go of their entire Wiimote when they let go of the B button to play the game.
Plus Nintendo just has better games in general.
I know how to bowl. I know my marks. I know that to get a strike I have to stand on the 24th board, and aim two boards right of the second arrow to make sure that I hit two boards left of it. I know that my throw needs to be nice and easy, simply a pendulum with little force at all. I know I’m not supposed to twist my wrist at all, that the ball will curve on its own.
I hate it when people know that I know all of this, because then they expect me to actually be able to do it.
I like how all of the little mini rants/stories connect to each other (opinions about writing, opinions about nintendo, nintendo bowling, regular bowling). I'm a little bit confused about what you're trying to say, though, (the beginning sounds like you're talking about how you have opinions about everything, but the end sounds like people have expectations of you that you don't think you can meet).
ReplyDeleteAlso, the end sounds pretty abrupt, but that's probably because of the 400 word limit. Maybe you could cut out some unnecessary words and use the space for a more... conclusive(?) ending.
Well I thought it was good. I thought it let the reader know a lot about you in a few words.
ReplyDeleteI think that it really lets the reader get to know you. The way that you transition from your opinion of the essay to the topic is nice: "you know what I also know?". The essay was really clear and I could see what you were trying to tell us. Good job.
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